FOUND: German Tourist lost in the Gibson Desert RATE?

FOUND : German Tourist lost in the Gibson Desert.

Mark Joseph.

After 2 days of searching, rescuers have found a German tourist, at the verge of death, lost in the extreme heat of the Gibson desert yesterday.

Concerns were raised as the Germana tourist did not arrive at his destination as planned. His friends alerted police immediately and a search for the missing tourist was soon organised.

Police search teams endured extreme temperatures of the Gibson Desert for 2 days before finding the German tourist. The desert located in Western Australia exceeded temperatures of 50 degrees Celsius during the past week. The German tourist was found alive, but delirious.

Police Commander Phillip Boatman praised his search team for their job in finding the lost tourist.
” We knew the heat was tough. And we knew what the odds were in finding the German Tourist. But my team never gave up and endured through the temperatures to find the tourist. And in moments like this, it makes me proud to be their commander. ”

It is allegedthatt the German tourist’s back pack fell off hismotorbikee and as a result, the tourist turned back in order to retrieve it. He quickly grew dizzy from hunger and was gettingdehydratedd in the desert heat.

Local Zodi Pitchfork, who lived in the outdoors for nearly 10 years claimed that it was a miracle the German tourist was found alive.
” In the impossible conditions; the 50 degrees heat and his shortage of supplies, it is a shere miracle that he was able to survive for 2 days. ”

The tourist was fed fluids intravenously at the local hospital where he made a steadfast recovery. He was dismissed from the hospictal at 10am Monday and is currently resting at Warburton hotel. The German tourist plans to continue his motorcycle tour to Ayers Rock.

A practice newspaper i wrote for a test. Any tips on improving?? Comments??? THank you.

Good article…Lots of misspellings German in the 2nd paragraph. Organized in the 2nd paragraph. Hospital in the final paragraph, also some errors in spacing in paragraph 5.

You may also want to give the "tourist" a name, to avoid repetitiveness of the term for example, "Tourist Sean Brown was not expected to live in the excruciating heat conditions he endured in the desert.. Brown is believed to have lost his backpack during his travel after it fell off his motor cycle. When going back for his pack, Brown became disoriented in the desert heat from dehydration and hunger deprivation. "